or to give it its full title ' Stand still! I need to crush you! '
During their third day of training, new recruits were tested upon their Pokémon’s combative skills against others. A ‘Pokémon battle’ as it was coined by the upper class, had not been unheard of, especially in the wealthier cities of johto, whose technology had allowed for training to be advanced in the past year or so. Indeed, the rich and powerful enjoyed, in what Mortimer himself believed to be a rather cruel sport, these battles in a special arena and were allowed to watch as these creatures tore each other apart. Such an arena had been marked out in paint a few days before.
The downside of having rats that can fire electrical bolts from their cheeks on a field however, is that when agitated, attacks would fly across into the nearby camps. To solve this, the military generals had commissioned fortified walls around the now rather savaged grassy field (that is to say, it had started as grass but now remained little more than churned and charred earth) to keep such accidents from happening again.
Tiberius was a fighter. Mort could have told you this simply by looking at the serpent. He was also brash, arrogant, ruthless and very large. However, he was not stupid. When it came for Mort to enter the training rectangle, he was pitted against a younger man by at least half Mort’s own age. Chase Austerby was a cheery, if not slightly cocky gent whose Violin exploits had earned him a small amount of fame around the base. Mort personally hated the damned thing, reminding himself on more than one occasion to have the item snapped in two when Tiberius was big enough to do so.
Chase himself owned a Sneasel, a Pokémon with feline qualities with two razor sharp blades for fingers. Scavengers but still vicious and deadly agile to boot, mort had known them to quite the opponent back in the day. There was also the slight issue that Sneasel were considered of the Ice ‘type’, an elemental category that Dragons were known to be vulnerable against. To Mortimer’s almost surprise, Tiberius was aware of this and when the match started, he remained calm and reserved in his motions, coiling himself into a smaller shape as the Sneasel began to enter the fray. However, within a few minutes of the dragon lurching ad lunging, he had grown irritable of his fruitless attacks. An annoyed dragon is not a pretty thing to witness, let alone own, and despite Mort’s instructions, Tiberius began more and more agitated as time went on, the Sneasel’s excellent jumping and evasive manoeuvres proving to be too quick, even for him.
It was at this point that Tiberius hissed and landed his first strike. A slap to the side with his tail launched the Sneasel’s away for long enough for mort to issue his next command. And with that, the dragon’s skin began to secrete a golden light, thick like molten glass and glowing like hot magma. It gelled over the Pokémon’s skin and formed all manner of gorgeous shaped, interlocking and shifting together like a second skin, twinkling as the dark storm clouds rolled in above them.
“Excellent work.” Mort said as the light screen covered his Pokémon’s body for the first time.
“Now, let us continue. “
Not a massive fan of this either, but for a guy with an art block, it'll do just fine. I hope you like my thoughts on light screen. I saw it as an organic, magical substance that the pokemon creates itself The liquid glass is secreted, hardens slightly and is then iether kept directly onto the pokemons body for defense, or can be expelled outwards to form a shield. Marika is also one jumpy, slippery girl. Tiber does not approve.
Mort -[link] Tiberius (Mort's Dratini ) - [link] Chase and Marika - [link]
I really love this piece! I love the composition and the details you put in it. I really just wish there was a little more color contrast, a few blue spots here and there, throw in some saturation of the blue and it will really make the piece pop. Not everywhere of course, but in places where you want to draw the eye/the focus.
Also I feel like there should be a little bit more of a blur on the Dragonair, because i feel like the motion just stops, you get it in the foreground but then it abruptly stops in the mid section. It it is in motion, it doesn't read. Also it would be nice to see some motion blurs on the pokemon Dragonair is fighting, like on its tail and back legs a little, It seems too stationary and even a little to rendered all the way through, I don't know what to focus on, so make the focal point of the other pokemon more clear
The very last critique I have is that on Dragonairs right fin. With the way the body is curling and judging on its thickness, it would be lost on the other side and it doesn't really make sense the way it is showing underneath the body.
All in all really good piece though, its very beautifully done.
these are all really brilliant tips, so i thank you for them it was hard to get the right feel for this one, so all the way through i was changing bits and eventually i just lost it and settled for what i had. ive taken all of the stuff youve said on board, so ill be sure to use them next time i do a biggun thank you again!
I really just wish there was a little more color contrast, a few blue spots here and there, throw in some saturation of the blue and it will really make the piece pop. Not everywhere of course, but in places where you want to draw the eye/the focus.
Also I feel like there should be a little bit more of a blur on the Dragonair, because i feel like the motion just stops, you get it in the foreground but then it abruptly stops in the mid section. It it is in motion, it doesn't read. Also it would be nice to see some motion blurs on the pokemon Dragonair is fighting, like on its tail and back legs a little, It seems too stationary and even a little to rendered all the way through, I don't know what to focus on, so make the focal point of the other pokemon more clear
The very last critique I have is that on Dragonairs right fin. With the way the body is curling and judging on its thickness, it would be lost on the other side and it doesn't really make sense the way it is showing underneath the body.
All in all really good piece though, its very beautifully done.
Wonderful work again my friend!